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AT LAST!!! 

I'VE FINALLY FINISHED THE REVISED VERSION OF CHAPTER ONE OF MY FIRST NOVEL. I JOINED ELFWOOD ABOUT FOUR MONTHS AGO AND POSTED MY FIRST VERSION OF CHAPTER ONE - THE TALES OF FAGELIO ON ELFWOOD.

AFTER SOME VERY TALENTED PEOPLE COMMENTED ON MY WORK AND HELPED ME I REALISED IT WAS RUBBISH!! =P

SOOOOO... 

I TOOK IT AWAY AND RE WORKED IT AND NOW... WELL IT'S NOT PERFECT BUT WHAT IS???

ANYWAY, I APPRECIATE HOW IT HELPS AND WHAT YOU CAN LEARN FROM OTHER PEOPLE SO ANY COMMENT IS WELCOME IN MY LIBRARY.

THE CHAPTER HAS BEEN SPLIT UP INTO 4 PARTS. NOT THAT IT REALLY WARRENTS IT. I JUST DID IT MORE FOR THE EASE OF READING.

DUM, DUM, DUM!!

HERE THEY ARE...

http://www.elfwood.com/libr/s/n/snugglebunny/ttof___chapter_one___part_1.wps.htm.html

http://www.elfwood.com/libr/s/n/snugglebunny/ttof___chapter_one___part_2.wps.htm.html

http://www.elfwood.com/libr/s/n/snugglebunny/ttof___chapter_one___part_3.wps.htm.html

http://www.elfwood.com/libr/s/n/snugglebunny/ttof___chapter_one___part_4.wps.htm.html

IT'S NOT THAT LONG I PROMISE.

IF ANYONE COMMENTS ON MY WORK I ALWAYS MAKE AN EFFORT TO RETURN THE FAVOUR!!

TIME FOR ME TO GET COMMENTING!!

=P

 

Comments

Since when do people feel the need to comment on your critism? Why do some people feel the need to *ahem* and other such aloof, annoying, patronising things! I always explain to the writer i'm not too hot on grammer and spelling so i try to comment on plot and character - the things that I am good at. If I ask the author a question about their work i really don't expect a smart arse answer from another reader!  

Have they not thought that if they spent as much time concentrating on the story, as they do on other comments, then they would offer half decent advice to the author?

Is that not the whole point of the exercise? 

Apparently, as i was informed by a very helpful reader who used *ahem* alot, telling the writer what they have done right is not helpful and it should all be the negative stuff then a little bit of good. For example, this = crap, this = crap, this = crap, if i did this i would blah, blah, blah, blah... but overall i thought i was very good. YES, BECAUSE THAT IS A BALANCED ARGUEMENT!! FOOL!!

However, the author in question liked my feedback so much that he: gave me his private email for more suggestions, sent me an alternative ending for one story and is going to be published in the new year! (Feeling slightly better now)   : - )


Elfwood

Wohoo!! Elfwood's back up and running! I had withdrawl symptoms from it for a couple of days. I've noticed a change in the speed of Elfwood and i can't wait to see the rest of the improvements! I wonder if their going to liven up the backgrounds at all?

It would be really cool if you could choose what background you want in your gallery and what border you want for your story. Just so you could personal it abit. Even if it was something simple like for: Egypitan = hyrogliphics (excuse spelling), Medieval = swords and castles, etc. 

However, i have a slight problem with the new Elfwood, they seem to have deleted my gallery, all my work and all links to it. I am not under the members at all, i can't search any of my work and when i have tried to email the tech support team the '404 page not found' message keeps coming up. However, what is strange is if i access my gallery via Elftown then i can find it. So, frustrating! Now i finally have decent feedback. Typical!


Elfwood Crits

What is the point of Elfwood Crits community? Is it literally just for artists or is the reason no one comments on stories becuase it takes longer and is more effort then just looking at a picture? My chapter is the only entry there that has no comments on it at all! Where every painting has. Never mind.

Anyway, that is the last of my moaning, and yes i do feel better for it! :D

I finished the first draft of my second chapter a couple of days ago (well i say finished, i rushed the last 500 words or so becuase i just needed to be able to say that i have made some real progress!) Half of the chapter is very good (i sound like a have such a big head!) but the other half needs sorting out big time!

I also need to do my second draft of chapter one and i have so many ideas for chapter three. However, i'm rubbish at planning and mapping, etc. So i just write. BUT, the more i write the more this world develops and the more i need to go back and change! It's a very long process and progress is slow. However, seeing from what i started out with and how it's developing now - it's just amazing. I know it sounds really corney but i am on a journey with my characters and i'm just noting it along the way.

I'm sitting down at the moment about to start chapter three but i stupidly put on Lord of the Rings: The Two Towers - extended for 'background noise'. It was a big mistake. I've been sitting at my lap top for nearly 2 hours and have yet to write a word!

(One last moan -
I have the flu and lost my voiceat work yesterday while my store was having it's annual audit done. So very tired and snotty...)

Constructive Or Just Critism ???

Why do people not seem to realise that constructive critism isn't just about telling people what they have done wrong but also letting them know what they have done right. It's all well and good pointing out what needs changing but what about things that need to be carried on.

What is wrong with a bit on encouragement to go along with the critism?

I am currently writing the first part of my novel and i have posted the first chapter on Elfwood to get some hints and tips. (Now this is my first try at writing something serious and seeing that this was my first draft i was pretty happy with myself). Most of the comments i recieved we're very helpful and pointed out a lot of basic mistakes i have made. These were also encouraging and supportive. (so thanks!)

But some just are just negative  -  this is really disheartening for a new writer like me! Should the more experienced writer's (and artists too) offer support as well as guidance?

It puts me in two minds. I need feedback to be able to improve my work but i don't want just negative comments that makes me feel like what i have written is a load of old twoodle and i need to scrap everything and start again - or just give up!

Just really needed to get that off my chest!

WYVERN'S

Is there any writer out there who has work published in Wyvern's Libary and is desperately craving feedback?

How frustrating is it when you spend hours writing a piece of work and post it on Elfwood, or other such sites, wanting for some of the other writers to give you feedbck which just doesn't come?

Now there's nothing wrong with telling people their works fab (hell i've done it on a few occassions!) but i'm looking for some real constructive critism to help improve my work - espically as i've just started writing a novel.

If your in the same boat as me - let me know! We could help eachother out??

Hi Guys!!

I've got 3 pieces of writing on Elfwood now and nobody has left me any feedback!?! Has anyone even read them?

I need some feedback before i start to write my next chapter! GIVE ME SOME TIPS!!

Take a look: http://elfwood.lysator.liu.se/libr/s/n/snugglebunny/snugglebunny.html

Ta mucho  XX

Elfwood Vs. Aldora World = Why?

I don't understand why Aldora World is causing such a big stir on Elfwood for? There two completely different sites for two completely different types of writers/ artists who apprciate different styles of writing and creating.

My character's are still very new and i look forward to watching them grow and adapt. But i do not want to do this in view of everyone! It's a very personal thing having an idea and watching it grow into some thing beautiful. This should only be shared when it's realised it's full potential and the writer/ artist can be sure that someone isn't going to use your ideas and hard work (which some artist/ writer's do put in!) for their own purposes.

However, i too, see no harm in this kind if this website. I think it's good that they are encouraging and inspiring young people to dapple in writing and artwork. For a younger audience it's going to be very inspirational. There is definately no harm in encouraging young talent who could in later years learn to develop their own characters and end up on a website like Elfwood - and then fully appreciate it.

Again, like you, i think everyone needs to remember that Elfwood is run by volunteers who generally work full time and then come home to help Elfwood.

Good luck to Aldora World and long may Elfwood continue!!

Harry Potter Heartbreak

Hmmm... Very annoying... i've already forgotten how to change the font!!

Anyway, I've just finished the last Harry Potter and i'm absolutely gutted? i can't help but feel kinda ripped off. I won't say too much just incase poeple haven't read it yet, but it's definately going to be a case of the film will be better! The book had me in tears a couple of times but completely ruined my view of my faviourite character!!


GRRRR!!!!

Maybe if i read it again it might get better!!

INTERESTING???

Here is my first (ever!!) LJ.

Today I posted my first (ever!!) Works onto Elfwood!! Yeah!! 

However, due to an unfortunate 2 years bout of writers block, they are not very good!! Hopefully in the next couple of weeks i can send in my saving grace!

Only problem is...

WHAT HAPPENS NEXT??????

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